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SNARKING TIME! *FORCED ZEPH (My character) TO DO SO FOR ME*    " Sometimes I wondered if I was seeing the same things through my eyes that the rest of the world was seeing through theirs. Maybe there was a glitch in my brain.     Bella Swan, Twilight, Chapter 1, p.11" Actually, you realized it far too soon and then completely forgets about it in the next four books. Change the was to "is always"     "That's Edward. He's gorgeous, of course, but don't waste your time. He doesn't date. Apparently none of the girls here are good-looking enough for him.     Jess

After an enjoyable meal at the Pickle Barrel, Yorkdale Mall was closing. On the escalator out of the subterranean restaurant, Matthew admired the small waterfall that spilled out across the archway above. The meal had been content and both men were quite pleased with their afternoon. "So how do we get back to the car?" Gilbert asked noticing all the gates being drawn across the shops and stores. "I guess we'll have to go outside and walk around," Matthew said pointing to the nearest exit. They walked out the sliding doors and into a group of smokers loitering outside. "Aw, man. Gross," Matthew said covering his nose with his sleeve, "Do t